That was ballsy posting something so incredibly feminine and blatantly Christian on NG knowing full well you'll get the crap blammed out of you.
Kudos, and you made the front page on top of that.
Writing and voice acting: Get someone to critique/correct your work before you post. And i know you want to spread the Gospel story, but your audience is smarter and more observant than you give them credit for. You don't need to spell it out for them in your notes.
Keep it up.